interesting. but needs work
it was an interesting story. story wise you have a good thing going. and even in some parts of the style, it was very interesting. but...this is not Noir. Noir is more then just black and white and creepy. its about character traits, setting, lighting, and so much more. you have a good start here. but as all persons studying visual arts is told "you have to know the rules...before you can efficiently break them."