I can tell you're new in general, so I'll give you some advice. Obviously you need to put in alot more animation to your submissions. This felt more like a slideshow than anything else. Also you definitely need other voice actors to help you out. Luckily Newgrounds is full of them, so all you got to do is ask. I recognize potential when I see it, so just keep on practicing and you'll be making great toons in the future. Good luck!