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Cat and Beaver

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I'm trying to start a story about a cat and a beaver.


Some teaser.

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I'm intrigued. The art is great and I really enjoy the beavers design. Nice and chonky. The only qualm I had with it was when the cat was being beat up and you used BAM several times. Switch up the word and colors a bit for less repetition. Otherwise, very solid beginning.

What happens next

Interesting art style with absolutely great framing. Sound effects are good, music fits the scenes fantastically. The animations take some getting used to, and the heat shimmer effect (the constant warping of the lines in virtually every scene) gets annoying. The story is OK with a good and unexpected cliffhanger at the end, although the pacing seems a bit off - cat's position towards beaver changes kinda quickly and feels a bit forced. Presenting it as an animated comic has its merits, but would require a lot more attention to the dialog - there are words missing or the wrong words used and the sentences generally don't have a very realistic feel to them.

In short: a lot of potential here, but also quite some points to think about. Maybe team up with a writer for the dialog - I take it you're not an English native speaker - and the pacing? I believe that would be a very good way to make a big jump in quality. Good luck!

cool look but wow what a downer ending lol

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Score
3.26 / 5.00

Uploaded
Nov 4, 2020
5:04 PM EST