Is this just audio and no animation at all? I think this would be better posted on the Audio portal instead of the Movie portal. You might also get better reviews and feedback on the Audio portal since they usually judge based on the audio alone and don't mind with any visuals so you can improve the quality of your music. Maybe you could try uploading it here again if you ever have make (or have someone else make) some animation that could go with this music.

I actually liked the start of the audio, didn't quite like it in the middle since it sounded quite weird to me (around 27 seconds). I also think it ended quite abruptly.