So first off, this is not an action/platformer/puzzle game. But maybe that's Newgrounds' fault for not having a more accurate category. Second, I'm not a grammar nazi these days, but this game is BASED on text, so it should be accurate. "She lounges forward" is funny, but probably not what you were going for. Third, some screens were so full of text the words were too small to read. So I had a few screens to guess through.
I know 2 stars is low, but I hope you polish this game up and keep writing. Give us some more description and some more choices. Find someone to edit and get a few people to critique the story before you hit the publish button on the next installment. Come back strong!
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Can you survive Citadel?
Jericoecass responds:
lolol!! Hope you liked/enjoyed it and I loved that you actually had the balls to give good actual criticism.. I don't wanna reply with a bunch of excuses because that's not how I roll but I will say! Im definitely not a grammar nazi and I actually tried to outsource people, offered to pay people and everyone said the story doesn't make sense,, its inedible!? I hope the story made sense and I do apologize for the screen to text ratio blah blah, out of all the things that I didn't know how to fix my self, that was the one that really bugged me the most. Thanks for the comment, I'll definitely make a part 2 just because you called me out ahaha.
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2.70 / 5.00
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