So first off, this is not an action/platformer/puzzle game. But maybe that's Newgrounds' fault for not having a more accurate category. Second, I'm not a grammar nazi these days, but this game is BASED on text, so it should be accurate. "She lounges forward" is funny, but probably not what you were going for. Third, some screens were so full of text the words were too small to read. So I had a few screens to guess through.
I know 2 stars is low, but I hope you polish this game up and keep writing. Give us some more description and some more choices. Find someone to edit and get a few people to critique the story before you hit the publish button on the next installment. Come back strong!