I respect that you're trying new things, but you seem to have forgotten what made Golder so popular in the first place: the pacing. The fact that all of these gags came out so fast really worked well for the comedic timing. Now that you've really slowed things down it's become incredibly awkward to watch. Not to mention the weird storytelling -- it's just so uncomfortable to me. This isn't really the place to be telling some sort of overarching dramatic story. It just doesn't work.