I js rlly liked it.
When your bus trip takes a sinister turn, can you survive the night?
A light horror themed interactive story made with Twine (Chapbook), featuring multiple endings.
All feedback appreciated.
Image credit (Unsplash):
Fachy MarĂn
Sandra Seitamaa
Kenny Kuo
Sandra Frey
fotografierende
JR Korpa
adrian
Music credit:
"Lost in Prayer" by Doug Maxwell
I js rlly liked it.
A good short story. I enjoyed your use of images to support the narrative. I managed to get the "good" ending on my first try, and I'm glad you chose to leave it as a mystery on that ending. I enjoyed going back through the story to learn more, but I really missed the undo/back button that you had in "Lost: Wood Road" since the first few choices you make only tell you more of the story, they don't have an effect on the ending. I had the same issue with "Lost: Wood Road" where the text didn't scroll back to the top sometimes after I made a decision.
The music accompanying this story was unobtrusive, and helped enhance the mood set by the story.
I liked the many choices and endings. I probably spent at least 20 minutes testing them all.
this was really good, I liked the SCP sort of vibes it gave off. a little short, but that's okay!
What little story was present was interesting. However, there was very little. I actually liked that no one story line gives away everything that is happening, but by playing through all endings, you can discover what the conspiracy in the plot is. However, you never find out why it is happening at all. Many choices led to the same ending, so that there wasn't more than four or five unique endings.
There were a few grammatical & spelling errors, but overall the writing was good.
Several people have commented on the game-play, but other than having to scroll to the bottom of each page & a few issues with pictures that didn't load, it's simple & effective.
Overall, the premise is good, but it needs expanding.