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Chipotle | The Average Life

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https://youtu.be/0ReoYotIyoM

Original Animated Series
The Average Life: Ep. 1
Chipotle

This week I take my appetite to chipotle!

Music: Snack Time by The Green Orbs

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Not bad at all! I just have some issues with it I wanted to bring up. The pacing was a bit slow, though. I felt like a lot of jokes would have landed better if they were said quicker, like the Panera Bread part where it was a good pause before the lady actually said the punchline. I'd also recommend trying to put more emotion in your voice since you sound pretty monotone. Not saying you have to sound over-the-top excited in everything you say, just more interested in your story. Kind of like you just read it off of a script with not much more added. It's not a huge deal, but it dampens the potential of some of your jokes with the constant pauses between dialogue also present.
I do like your animation style though. I can tell you're going for a more simplistic approach and you're nailing that. There's some fluidity issues (like where the baby climbing up the wall just makes an abrupt turn) but it doesn't take away from anything.
Overall funny and enjoyable, but the pacing could use some work to really help your jokes. Just wanted to give some feedback on it, though.

This has a comedy tag, but there wasn't really anything humorous in it. The animation wasn't that good and it was very slow. Like, really slow, you need to speed up the pace. There weren't really any good or interesting jokes, except or the working out...your fingers thing, because of the buff arms and the joke itself, and the ending was pretty boring and abrupt. Your voice does not sound interesting. You're telling us a really mundane story here, man, and your voice acting is not helping. Try to find some more interesting topic to talk about, add more jokes and make it faster.

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321
Votes
87
Score
3.13 / 5.00

Uploaded
Jul 12, 2018
2:40 PM EDT
Genre
Comedy - Original