Nice story
And with this one you tell a good story it's the story that has kept it going good for this well enhanced idea and I must say that ending alone was pretty impressive with some nice points some more fancy effects and such splshy effects would be a huge plus so nice job. But to better improve just try adding a few extra effects on stuff here and there. Untill next time keep up the great story telling and make more stuff
~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
Needs some flashy effects
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