It has a good concept to it, and based around the run loop of the main character, animating the characters is going to be fairly limited. Character design is also pretty damn sweet. Ever watched Archer? It reminded me of that style. But, I suggest adding a bit of work on the voice-acting. The voices aren't exactly the best, unless you are not willing to use voice-acting. But, other than that, I can tell this will be a good visual novel. And I've played good visual novels before.