A good portfolio / show-reel to give us an idea of your work and talent. I've seen many of these from freelancers we work with, some better, some worse, hence my rating.
Your animation is ok, your character design is the best part and should convince enough people out there that you are indeed talented. However, a voice-actor would be nice and helpful to present your storyboards (or at least one).
The music you choose for your pitch is good, pleasent without annoying the viewer.
THANK you very much for your critique man I really appreciate it
This loooks great man!