The story is interesting and I like the concept of gigantic and bipedal war machines. If possible, it would be nice if you could post the plot somewhere, in the description or in a blog post, because it's not very clear what is happening (or perhaps extending upon it).
I'm not reviewing this. Out of laziness, but also because I feel that the reviews below as well as your own criticism on this are spot on. Sometimes, it's just interesting to go back and see how things were and compare to how things are.