I dunno..
The humor needed to be a tad more obvious. It helps to use speech.
Author Comments
This is the first episode, i don't know if i'll be making another one, i just finished this one cuz i started working on it while doing my other movie "the strongest". I guess it'll all depend on what rating the movie gets. Again pointers will be appreciated. Thanx you all.
*UPDATE*
well i am seriously thinking about making a second episode now seeing how this one got decent reviews. And to answer one of the reviews..yeah most of the story was from an episode from beavis and butthead i forgot to mention that, at the beggining i had planned to make that same episode but with my characters instead but in the end i just changed my mind and tried to make it a lil different. This one was just to check the score this series would get, the next ones will be completely original.
Could've been a lot better
Story:
Kind of a funny story but could've been made a lot funnier and better though. If some parts were exaggerated and maybe with music like "dun dun dun dun!" so it's like "RED ALERT RED ALERT! NOSE BLEED!" It all seemed to be very calm throughout this which made it less funny. 5/10
Graphics:
Not very good actually. The art was boring and basic, too dry and amateur. The animation wasn't too good either. Could've been a LOT better in both areas. The bumper animation (the little intro) was also extremely amateur in the graphics area. 4/10
Sound:
The sound at the bumper animation was really cool. The rest of the sound like those little beeps got extremely annoying though. 6/10
Overall:
Could've been a lot better and after writing this whole review down I just realised this was submitted in '02 lol. I'm sure you've improved and this review probably doesn't mean anything haha.
-ShortMonkey-
Funny
Cool movie. What was with the turd he stared at? I thought he was gonna use it or something.
Keep up the good work.
lol
lol hes a ten year old stuck in a teens body as he says in his profile it was pretty good man but then u got gayasses that only judge you by what else they have seen that dont know how fucking hard it is to make the shit we make and yes i know i havent made shit either but youre right not on this name mine sucked
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911 for a fucking nose bleed?sounds got anoying and started makin no sence
CheveLoco responds:
damn where's ur sense of humor?