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It may confused you there more to it but please cuz i can't make smooth but understand story, pay no attention but the story more
just details i know it a short just watch the dang thing

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I'll give you credit for the animation because it was pretty legit for the most part, but this has problems:

1. Please learn to stretch out your backgrounds. There were too many white edges being exposed here. Even a black edge in one part?
2. If you're going to use text, please learn to give it extra time for people to read. A lot of it goes by way too fast, so nobody can read it.
3. I strongly recommend Swivel so that your animation is not on loop. It's a free program, so it should be no problem to get.

Also this is just a nitpick, but please learn how to word out your sentences in your Author Comments section. I'm usually not much of a grammar nazi, but half of it I could barely even understand. It doesn't have to be perfect, it just needs to be understandable.

Now don't think I'm hating on you. I'm only giving out constructive criticism. And I hope you take my advice and try to improve in the future. And I hope you do. Good luck!

Messy, unoriginal and not worth much of a vote.

~M~

kingX0 responds:

oh come on

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Votes
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Score
1.66 / 5.00

Uploaded
Dec 26, 2016
6:28 PM EST
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flash