This animation was jarring. Seriously.
Your voice work is superb besides the clearly pitched man and his son.
However, your animation and amazing audio isn't synced up which is what you were practicing. Certain scenes went by to quick and your animation was very choppy. Hopefully whatever animation software you get will be able to help with audio syncing.
The writing was interesting here and there but nothing really made me chuckle or laugh.
Honestly, the great voice work kept me watching the video. It made the viewing way less painful than it would have been if your audio quality was lower.
Keep at it!