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DIMENSION4L Pilot

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"Hazel has a flashback in the form of a nightmare about a very unfortunate event that happened years ago.
On top of that she has to deal with two very obnoxious students at work."


It's done! I mean sure, it's pretty cringey, but it's done! I started this in January 2015, so it's about time. I haven't really done anything like this before so be gentle. :')


Thanks to all the amazing people who helped me!


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Also on youtube: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3b3pBDVjU8Y&feature=youtu.be

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I always feel like I am late to these things, great work

So after seeing EP1, i looked through you other work just to see if there is a EP2 yet. I can see what you meant when you said you rebooted this pilot. I have to say it is really good of you to attempt doing an animation series. I don't find it cringey. I think sometimes that term gets over used these days. I think you going back and redoing it, shows how much you have improved. Keep it up!

Really cool. Looking forward to part 2!

I love the animation and almost everything about it, I was just a bit offset with some of the lines "hey, get back here" and a simple "umpf" when bumping into another teacher.

Other than that, I'd love to see more!

kartsuli responds:

Ah, thank you!

Yeah, I had no prior experience of directing anything so I didn't really pay attention to that until later on. I think I asked for some retakes but things happened and Amy couldn't provide new lines so I tried to work with what I had. :)

I'm intrigued so far, I know you probably put tons of work into this so I don't want to criticize much. But at the same time I wanna mention a few things that could have been improved. That dark transition when the girls are going through the doorway with the footsteps dragged on a bit too long. The initial situation for why the girls got into trouble seemed a little forced, I mean who makes a scene out of the blue in the classroom on purpose then gets worried afterwards as if they didn't know what would happen. Would have been better if they got a laugh from the class or had some smug expressions when they were caught since they knew what they were doing.

Otherwise though, the weird blend of settings and scenes is interesting for me so far. No idea if i'll like the direction it goes, but it looks like you have some cool bad guys set up and some secret admirer love interest set up.

PS: art style is really cute as well.

kartsuli responds:

Thank you for the review! Hmm, maybe you're right. Now I'm also wondering why exactly I didn't give them smug expressions. It would've fit a lot better, I admit. I think my original idea was to make Hazel look so incredibly intimidating that they would've regretted messing with her, but that kinda fell short because of the simplistic style.

Glad to hear that! Also, thanks. :>

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