You shouldn't call @pankclaw a grammar Nazi. Improper spelling is highly unprofessional (that is, if you're striving towards being a professional animator). I get you're from a different country where you speak a different language but still, this is a name we're referring to.
As for the submission the art style was ok, could use a lot more detail. The voice was actually very clear, so props for that. For a simple animation it's promising, but needs more work.