Heh,
Interesting crossover of all those CN classics.
Can't wait to check out the next episode!!!!!!!!!!

I like the basis you have for the characters so far. The story had a good start. The animation is a bit rough, but it's decent enough.

The dialogue was a bit fast. I'm a pretty quick reader, but even I felt a bit rushed. Although I was able to get it on one play through, it did take away a bit from me focusing on the animation itself while I focused on the text. So you may want to slow that down. I think voice acting would add a lot to this, but I know it isn't always easy to get that. Either way, I think more sound in general could have been a bit better. The music was good when it played. However, some soundtrack mixed in, like in the bus chase scene, would have helped. It was too silent in general. I mean the silence worked well at spots, particularly the beginning. But I feel like a more fleshed out soundtrack would have added a lot to this.

I do feel like you have potential, though. You just need to keep at it.

amazing, the only problem i have was the speed of the text it is too fast for people to read but it is a great toon, keep them coming .