Really good.
The plot was a bit unclear, but the animation was amazing!!!!!!!
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Final animation for my animation course :D There are sooo many things I wish I could do better for this one. But with more practice anything is possible... in the future!
emisen95 responds:
Thank you! I'm aware of that and will try to write clearer stories in the future! ^^
It's okay, while this looks <i>very<i> rough around the edges for an animation, it seems that you are a very good illustrator, committing to an anime style of years past that only brings me back to the days when I was less than a decade old watching dubs and subs with my older siblings. While the consistency of each character's figure varies from being logical even down to proportionate hands, to the characters being dwarf-like with their relatively large head. All in all for a 4 week project this is digestible and conceivable to be a very good animated piece, but it also reminds me of the front-page content back in Newgrounds' earlier years.
emisen95 responds:
I totally agree! I'm sure there could be much more smoother lines and I really need to start putting more effort into the lineart. Before I made this I already told the teachers that it would be kinda "sketchy" so I hope they won't be to surprised.
Haha yeah right! I also remember how the older newgrounds animations used to be! And I'm glad people are improving so fast! Thank you for the feedback! :D
nice animation, love it
emisen95 responds:
thank you! :D
That was...interesting. ^^;
There is a sense of mystery involved, I like that.
Too ambiguous as a story base though. Recommendation : connect the viewer more deeply with the character's feelings. Example : show a flashback memory of what the character is so anxious about. Offer a glimpse of the story focal point without divulging too much. Answer the questions as to "why is character 'B' important to character 'A'?" ,clarify "what is the origin of those ribbons & do they make up a key part of the character's subconscious?".
I applaud your music choice. It creates the mood well and captures the attention.
Hears an idea, add even more Background sound effects but keep them subtle to add a sense of realism. almost as if the watcher was there.
All in all I liked it. I look forward to a sequel. Keep up the practicing & You will continue doing well. You can Do It! :)
[Off Topic: have you seen the anime Sukisho ? This video sort of reminded me a little of it.]
emisen95 responds:
Thank you! I'm glad I managed to make it mysterious (that was my original plan).
Yes I also feel that my story isn't easy to understand, especially since you don't know that much about the characters except for this animation. I'll try to make it more clear from others perspective and add in more glimpses that could be useful.
Yes, I was so stressed out with the music at first! But when I found it, I knew it couldn't fit better! I was suppose to add some background sounds but I didn't have time to find it... ;(
Yes actually I have (googled it)! but I'll have to re-watch it to remember what happened x)
thank you so much for all the feedback! I should actually start making these animations about these characters from "the start" to built up the story but I'm still struggling with the start so I kind of just jump from different scenes I made up.
Gorgeous animation and music fits in just nicely. Well done. Please keep up the good work.
emisen95 responds:
Thank you for the feedback! I really appreciate it :D I'll try to make more with these characters and add in more of my other characters too. ^^