Like the style and animation qualities. I think this has potential, and you could get a lot of mileage out of it. As an experiment, this looks like it works out. Sure there are spots with a little choppy feel, but it's a start after all.
With a little more development on the storyline, say some intro... build up to the poignant climax and settle on a finished sentiment, you could really have something. Before you think this lacks, it doesn't. It's still only an experimental beginning, and there are only so many stars to work with. As a full-on animation, it would just need fleshed out a little more, like the background of the characters, at least to one degree or another. If you worked just a little more of that in from the beginning, even with a few flashbacks along the way to add to them, you would have a winning combination both with pointing out that sad truth about the very common lie (the 'don't worry...' line) but with possibly a further statement about wars, war heroes, and the respect due any of the military...
It's got real promise, and as always, you do good work... Now, I think you can take this idea to the next level and really make something with it. You're definitely onto something!