Pretty slow start, made to feel even slower because of the lack of proper amination of our Crow character. I wasn't not really sure what was happening because the animation did not convey whatever concepts you were trying to show. This was painful to watch.
I watched the video again and reread the dialogue. The dialogue is psuedo-philosophical/science/spiritual gibberish. Whatever you were trying to make the viewer understand is lost because the initial scenes without dialogue were too confusing and distracted me from getting immersed in your story. Better animation, pacing and dialogue would have gone a long way towards making this halfway decent. Don't be discouraged, learn from your mistakes and carry on.

This reminds me a bit of the book the Silmarillion. Tolkien talked about his world being ultimately composed of music. I would suggest you take a look, at least the wiki page, it might give you some ideas.