I think i can see this as a series. the thing is the character voices they need more drama, like spongebob with all the yelling and screaming and the crazies! the voices sounded very poor, you problaly did this in your room and had to keep from making too much noise, I understand that but if you maybe try to bring it up a notch. at least until you get a chance to own your own mini studio, or move to the garage (if you have one) and let people know that your going to use it for your projects. other than that it's pretty good love to see how the story would develop.