It wasn't terrible, but the plot seemed a little vague through the visuals. Without reading the description it's tough to figure out what's intended to be going on... It feels a little rushed, which can also cheapen the whole thing. If you want the best improvement for the least alteration, just take your time, even double check the story board and work in manageable chunks to get through a whole project. That will make sure you have something that comes out complete so you don't depend on folks reading everything up...
The humor was great, tho... lol.