Maybe instead of sweating out the hours to come up with something completely new, I'd just suggest you dig back into this one. I'm used to the cryptic and unusual, so it's hard to shake me off in a difficult plot. I truly believe you just need to take the self discipline and patience (especially now that you've posted older works like this) and revisit to show and see for yourself how far you have grown since then. Even if you don't rest on your laurels, you should not throw them to the side either. You'll sooner find yourself wringing hands and remarking at how hard it is to make something new.
Hope to see you continue to grow and mature as an artist. This really has potential, it just didn't get quite there.

Listen, I know that this is old and all. You can follow the story and it does in some way makes sense. The point is, you will make better. You have the tools, now all you need is the experience. I think you can make something amazing. Just hold tightly to your creative will and I'm sure over time you can make so to a higher caliber (god knows it's taking me a while to get there). Until then, keep studying and improving! I'll definitely be watching.

Bad sfms don't make sense. Good sfms don't make sense but at least you can follow.

This was... bland. Sorry dude, you need purpose behind that peashooter.

decent editing and a sad ending :c haha, pretty good though