Since you seem so worried about you english, I'l try to help you out Even though english is not my native language..
At 1:50 Monk says "learnt" but that's the past participle of learn, it should be the past tense "learned". But that is a very difficult subject, and very hard to notice Most "native english" people would make the same mistake.
At 3:25 Davis says "you always felt me odd". I think that what you were going for is that Monk thinks he is strange. Then it would be "You always felt I was odd" or instead of "felt", use "think".
Davis again at 3:33, should be "I will only COME when I BECOME more powerful".
At 4:13, Liso's line, the word "servent" is misspelled
Him again, 4:27, the phrase is poorly constructed. If it means Davis will gain power that will enable him to defeat anyone, t should be something like "if you obey me, I will make you so powerful, you will defeat anybody."

About the other features of the video: I liked the music, it was well fitting. The animation seems smooth enough, though the floors rendering speed is a little low (lots of light dots that fade away) and the character's movement leave a "trail". The story s interesting enough, though in 5 minutes you could fit in more information. And finally, I felt that Monk should have a real name.
All-in-all, a nice video. You just need to make it more uniform (dialog with char's image, withouth, then with again is really off putting).

looks pretty cool keep it up

your intro takes forever, and the whole thing is bad.

maybe its your 1st vid, keep improving.

I don't like the intro song. I don't know why, I usually like heavy metal.

Um I do like how the characters talk to each other. I kind of want it to be like banjo kazooie where sounds play while the text reads out. Some people might complain about that but it was a style choice.

I like how the characters look but its too slow. Have you seen the super Mario bros z speed. Try to match that.

The Last Unicorn.... sweet. Nice instrumental rendition. You got an extra star for the music even though it didn't really fit the video much. The video itself was pretty boring. Intro was pretty cool. These sprite vids really need something to draw you in before you just have a bunch of talking. In old video games like Chrono Trigger or Symphony of the Night, Final Fantasy... Usually something happened at the beginning to draw you in before they bombard you with a bunch of talking so you actually care what they have to say. Not bad sprite animation though I guess.