While your series is quite different, it is rather low-quality. You lose points for your pontifications. You may be trying to be funny, but Ayn Rand, with all her defects, was never pro-Shadow Government. Most critics never understood the salient points, especially in Atlas Shrugged. Yes, one had to wade through a lot of crap to get there, yet this is true of many "classics," such as Brothers Karamazov.
You have the skeleton of an interesting plot. You need to have a cogent flow and plausible sinews and skin. I hope this critique will encourage you, as it is very refreshing to see something other than the same ole recycled and/or sub-moronic offerings.