I gave you something for the effort. I just didn't like the story... at all. The music doesn't play well with the story either.

Cool, nice story. I want to play the game now!

Continuity errors, as well as grammatical ones in the narrative. The odd moment where "J" on Jack's name wasn't capitalized. Also, when he's walking in the gameplay footage his trousers change a shade of blue, as well as the repeating floor's bitmap cutting off. A very amateur mistake. Make your OWN background, because bitmap backgrounds don't really work. And the guns are a bit boring looking too. But you'll get there. c:

The art needs some definite improvements.