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I'm taking my first ever animation class, and our first assignment was to animate three scenes and a jump. So this is what I came up with.

It's definitely one of the smoothest things I've done, in my opinion. My abuse of the blur filter forced me to convert it to a video file, though, so for the first time ever, I'm uploading one of those instead of a Flash file.

Runtime: 0:37

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I know the assignment said three scenes and a jump, but I would really have loved to see you finish this one properly. I'm not sure if you were going for something funny, or if having an actual punchline wasn't a part of the assignment, but as it stands, this is fairly dull. Your style and animation is fine, though I'd love to see you do some more work on character models. I usually don't have a problem with lack of details, but seeing the character in profile just made him look really off, probably because you've used straight lines and it's not very clear where his midsection's actually at. The same goes for when he slumps over in the chair.

The SFX you've used is mostly fine, except for the moaning it all fit and had pretty decent quality. Would love to see something a bit longer and with more of a punchline than this one!

Aqlex responds:

Hmm, in my opinion, I did finish the piece as much as I ever meant to. The punchline was really that the fan just didn't help the situation.

What was the problem with the moaning? Did it sound too low quality?

Thank you for the review!

This was pretty interesting. I will admit I had to watch it a few times to fully understand it, that's mostly because it went by so fast though.

The plot was simple, but it was entertaining and I can appreciate how you didn't need to rely on dialog to tell a story. It was portrayed well visually. However, I'm not entirely sure what happened in the end. Did the fan just not work, or was it just turning on very slowly and the guy was impatient? That wasn't quite clear.

The art style looks a bit too simple and could use some refinement, mainly character art, backgrounds were pretty decent though. The best thing artistically was probably the bus. There wasn't a lot of actual animation but what was there looked pretty decent. Adding more poses and inbetweens would help. The shot of the view looking up at the fan was pretty cool looking, and probably the most interesting shot in the entire short. The filters in this also really added to the visual appeal. They looked nice and never seemed unfitting to the scene, so good job with that.

As for audio, the sound effects all seemed fitting. The ambiance was nice and really added to it.

Overall, a decent piece. I enjoyed it, but some things could use some work. Good luck with your future works!

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Aqlex responds:

You were right about the fan turning very slowly and not really doing anything to help the guy cool off.

Thank you for the thoughts, they're good to hear and think about. And thank you, review request club!

I liked it a lot! The animation was perfect except at the part when he throws the bag.
Keep up the good work!

Aqlex responds:

Thanks for the review. Yeah that bag wasn't the best...

I love it.

Aqlex responds:

Sweet, thanks for the review man!

too short, but i saw some major improvements in your animation skills

Aqlex responds:

Thank you! Longer stuff will hopefully be coming one day...

Credits & Info

4.71 / 5.00

Oct 30, 2013
3:00 AM EDT