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Jane doe s game

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I hope you enjoy this story about a girl who won a game contest.

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You had a pretty nice story going...I recommend basically what ClimbLadders said. I wouldn't worry about the drawing aspect of it yet--you'll improve over time. If you make another one, storyboarding will definitely help the pacing of your characters and dialogue, and it'll flow much more seamlessly! Trust me, it works like a charm.

flashmakeit responds:

I will trust your words. Thank you

It was a pretty good concept, but you really should improve on your drawing style. the voices were still pretty good (average) but i'am sure you can do better than this.

All in all i give you a 3/5 for the input and trying (and for me not to look like a total a**hole, like someone below on the second line :) )

flashmakeit responds:

Thank you for the review.

haha you made TomFulp so handsome

flashmakeit responds:

Yeah he is good looking. Thanks so much for watching and for the high score.

Was that a joke?
This was ugly in every aspect. Sorry.

flashmakeit responds:

The clocks on the table lends credits to fable.

thats a bad ass...car!!

flashmakeit responds:

Wow thanks for watching.