Nice lighting. Good camera and blocking movements. I hope you keep at it. If you want to know how to write a good story, I recommend "Story" by Robert McKee. Though its about film, a lot of what he says applies to any form of entertainment that uses strong visuals.
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This was good, and yet there was no story to it. Is there more coming? It's quite intriguing, but not enough yet.