....not giving me much to go on man lol. How can I make it better?
A lot of the text was cut off of the screen, there is that obnoxious water mark in the center of the video, and it just generally lacks the polish. You should try to go over it again, and fix a lot of the obvious issues before you re-upload it. It does seem like you've put effort into this, but in my opinion you're not quite done yet, and as it currently is, I don't think its ready to be on newgrounds. Sorry man, but I'm going to have to blam this for now, with a little extra work it could easily get on the site though so don't give up.
Thank you for the honest response :)