To be honest, it’s alright. The plot is also OK, and also a bit funny. Sorta weird though, but overall, quite good!
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This is a random short including the drawings of my Wacom for the first time. Also, this is part of the 2nd NatMarathon, who is battling Misty Marathon. I know the song is horrible text to sing, but better than nothing, right?
ok....
is good.. and funny.... lol....
but.... naaa..
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4/5, 5/5
TheRealNat23 responds:
Thanks!
This makes no sense...
TheRealNat23 responds:
Sorry, I'll try to be more clear next time.
I don't know what just happened.
You need to make it more clear what happens in your cartoons because I don't think anybody can understand what's happening unless you tell them.
I'm going to give you a high rating (sort of) because of the improved animation and artwork. It's a step up from your previous cartoons and I'm guessing that's because you have a graphics tablet now. The colors were nice and bright, and just plain colorful which compensates for the confusing plot.
Why is there booing when there's nobody there? We should see a more far away shot of the audience and we should see them boo and make the boo sound with their mouth.
Why does the bagel appear on the guy's plate? This is a rhetorical question. There was no reason for this and this was completely random.
It was good when he stole the guy's bagel but why would he hit him in the face with toast? That was weird.
I liked the song near the end.
Why did you steal the end of one of my deleted scenes? The "hart = broken" thing was basically taken from a deleted scene from Adrellia Village #39.
Good luck.
TheRealNat23 responds:
"I'm going to give you a high rating (sort of) because of the improved animation and artwork. It's a step up from your previous cartoons and I'm guessing that's because you have a graphics tablet now (Yes, I have a Wacom now, as said in the description). The colors were nice and bright, and just plain colorful which compensates for the confusing plot (Thanks, I am learing animation from you actually)."
"Why is there booing when there's nobody there? We should see a more far away shot of the audience and we should see them boo and make the boo sound with their mouth (Sorry, I'll try to do that next time)."
"Why does the bagel appear on the guy's plate? This is a rhetorical question. There was no reason for this and this was completely random (Swiss found a bagel and Swiss stole the bagel so he could have it)."
"It was good when he stole the guy's bagel but why would he hit him in the face with toast (Who hit who in the face with toast, are you talking about the movie scene or the couch scene with the egg?)?"
"Why did you steal the end of one of my deleted scenes? The "hart = broken" thing was basically taken from a deleted scene from Adrellia Village #39 (It was unused, so I just wanted to show it here for something. Plus, we are like a pretend production anyways).
"Good luck (Thanks, same to you with Playback)."