I would've loved to see something fully done, as opposed to just an opening. The other thing is I'm aware of your very very early work. The cute well defined black lines fit the style when you were doing more 'chibi'. When you're doing something more mature, the thick black lines become cumbersome. I think you have a lot of potential and I'd like to see you make something you truly feel strong passion about, and develop it fully. No rush. Dates have no secret magic to them, people will enjoy them regardless.