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itachi & kisame 1

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this is the first cartoon i evermade but i love constructive critism and recommend any software that might make this better thnx.

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Not too bad for your first, but it was rather short.

Tip: Next time, try to use slightly thicker lines on your animated characters and such.
Especially the very outline on your characters should be a little thicker than the normal lines.
It makes everything look much better.
Also if you're going with a completely black outline, make the black clothing or hair slightly brighter.
Not exactly gray, but a slightly brighter shade of black.

Of course it's up to you if you want to use my tips or not, but I'm throwing this out there so that you know that you have several options. Keep doing this and try to improve, and you'll see that you'll get better.

Once again, not bad for your first.

FEARxVAMP responds:

thanks alot those are great tips and are very helpful. ill make sure to this the next time thnx

Not bad for a first attempt, I been only animating for the past couple of months but trust me, the short run times will pull in mediocre scores, even the ones that are poop jokes. :( Good luck and keep up the good work.

FEARxVAMP responds:

thnx it was only short because i didnt have a full idea i was just drawling and that came out but yeah it is short lol

This wasn't too bad. Simple with a good premise. I like the thought you put into it, and for a first animation, it's not too bad. You could use some smoother animation though, take your time on it, and don't have it move so fast. But hey, I'm just a voice actor.

FEARxVAMP responds:

thanx ill take more time thought into my animations so itll be along time before my next animation and ill try to put voice acting in one in do time but only after my actual animation gets better .

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3.63 / 5.00

Nov 15, 2012
12:17 AM EST