Well the animations could use some improvements and the audio was too low and I didn't really get the joke (although that could be because I couldn't hear what they were saying sometimes).
Also I want to address your attitude in the comment. You're saying "not that you would know" like your speaking down to all the animators of Newgrounds and there are a lot of hardworking talented people making lots of awesome stuff here. I'm sure you didn't mean it like that but I'm just pointing it out that you should try not to write something that could sound rude or offend somebody in your description.
I think you know that you can do better, all it takes is more time and practice.