with a title like Dragon's Tear, it is funny but i think you should take it more seriously and have a more deep plot wit strong feeling, descriptions and of course, DRAGONS. its not bad but certainly not good. i like it. all i ask is to take the story seriously, make the voices unique and maybe get some other people to help.
Better than my writing.
after the first few moments I thought I had enough... I could read better than understand the commentary... (hint put in text and make it go slower)
I do like this story. Got some chuckles outa me, very good going!