I really liked what you were going for here, but I thought the monologue was a little trite. Lots of nice little touches here. I would have liked to see more relevant stuff happening in the squares. Also, sound quality was not great.
Author Comments
This interactive animation was made for the multimedia project This Book's All Lies. The story here is an example of daydreams I would often have about the girl I liked when i was 12-14. [This is a resubmission because I mistakenly placed it in the games category]
It's a very sweet story, but the interactive part of this flash was a little confusing. The vocals need to be a little cleaner/louder. Music, not so much. Needs to be a toned down a little. other than that, nice work.
im in tears. great job. it softens my heart what youve done here. it reminds me a little bit of my past experiances. i cant say enough what this means to me. its so descriptive. are you an author perhaps. i think its the ending that was the best/worst. a damn good flash
If the first one you submitted was in the wrong category, you ask Wade to delete it. It also might be a good idea to say in the description that this was resubmitted, because I thought this was stolen for a couple minutes. Anyway, I'll give this the same score I did for the other one.
pzimmerman responds:
Thanks for the tip! Just messaged Wade.