It hit that soft spot, the music matched the memory and emotion you were trying to display, try adding some simple color, or even better, touches of gray. I know after the boy goes back in time, and becomes a baby again and recognizes his Grandfather for the first time, there is not much you can do after that but you ended int almost on a lazy note. If you could have a last kick to it to make it really remediable it would be nice.
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A kid loses his grampa, in his mind he wishes to go back in time to when his grampa was still alive, maybe he was sent way far behind.
Short animation for NATA 2012, i hope i can make it in, for those who watch, thanks. This took me about 3 days, 5 days ago i had the idea, i though i wasnt going to make it.
My youtube: youtube.com/frankyofl (ill start making more stuff like this)
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francisyfl responds:
yeah, i was at the point where i was like "is this really a good story ?" and that got me really lazy at the end. I wanted to make it the piece of art that i had in mind.
Thanks a lot :) i really needed constructive critisism.
Very well done, the music took me away and you guided me? Yes, Under Judgment no more! Bam!
francisyfl responds:
omg thank youu sooo much, im so glad you liked it :D
heartwarming, short but powerful, i really liked the animation job as well!
francisyfl responds:
Thanks a lot !! yeah, i was going to make it longer but i think its harder to tell a story in a shorter way than a larger, like comercials for example, only 20-30 secs and they tell you everything
nice and heart warming
francisyfl responds:
so thankful for your review : ) thanks
