The animation is actually is pretty good since you're a young animator.
It'd be pretty awesome if a fish/creature like that did exist.
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Something I made for science. It's sort of rushed but I don't really want to work on it anymore, so I put a preloader on it and here you go.
The voice is my friend's but it was edited in Garage Band.
It's just the beginning
the voice sounds fake as it was forced to be deep (or your just going through puberty). The mic is not that good, but I guess that's what to expect when you start off; I mean I wouldn't ever start off something with all the resource before, because who know, I may end up not try to profess in it. Either way if you want to make it understandable, either speak louder, or add subtitles because I really want to know what you have to say.
The artwork are delightful, I just enjoy seeing the cute face of the, what you call it? Steve. I do think though, the trollface is a little immature, I understand your 13, but that doesn't excuse it. I'm not saying you should never use trollface, but it's not a fitting thing in this kind of flash. I'll also admit the censor is a nice, funny touch and it fits what you are presenting.
So a science project. Is it Biology? Are you being graded? If you are, was it a good grade?
I may have given you a 6, but if I were your teacher, I'd probably give you a B- or a solid A (if I had a script I'd definitely would give you an A). My reason is, if your a musician, you would be graded by if your music is any good, but if your in music class, you are graded by how well you improved or at least by how you perform in accordance to your current skills (I hope you understand my metaphor).
If I were to say anything you should change in what you have in your flash is, unless it enhances the viewer's experience, take away anything unnecessary. I I'll also say for project outside the classroom, you should look for voice actors or get a better microphone (I'm not expecting you to actually buy one).
Other than that, you did awesome with the flash.
NinjaCube responds:
Wow! I am completely stunned by the length of this review.
I know the voice is pretty bad. My friend recorded his voice with a apple microphone slash camera thing. We also edited it in garage band to lower the voice so that's why it sounds so forced. Both my friend and I who were working on this project have pretty high voices so that's why we had to edit it. For later projects I have been thinking about getting voice actors, like you said, or having some of my friends with voices that are more suitable for the characters I put in my flash. I'm also trying to find a headset microphone because I have some birthday money left.
The Trollface was sort of a test to see how many of my classmates actually knew what it was. Only one person did.
I did actually got an A on the project because the video was included in a presentation, with a whole bunch other information and a podcast.
So, yeah, thanks for the review. I really appreciate it.
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NinjaCube responds:
sumfin
Enlightning.
This is reasonable, yet funny. I liked the graphics too. But the voices were a little hard to hear.
NinjaCube responds:
Maybe I'll add subtitles. Thanks for the review