Gone off at a tangent

Well, I'm not sure this has anything to do with the game, but that said, it is a world away from the game that you made. Perhaps you should work on more of this sort of thing, as opposed to the game, as you seem to be decent at animations.

Lip-sync is probably the way you want to go, for immediate improvement to your work. Yes, you broke the fourth wall, by drawing attention to it and that was a half-decent joke, but I feel that you need more to make it work, before making more toons.

The way that the plot is quite short, you could make things like this longer, if you're after a series. If not, you can just do little skits, but you'd get a better following if you end up with a solid script that you can develop into something overall more worthy.

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I enjoyed it

As others I'm a bit puzzled what this submission has to do with the game, but maybe it's all just part of the plan?

Anyway, the submission is quite good. At first I thought "oh, the mouthes don't move, I guess I have to deduct points for that" but then you addressed that yourself in the flash. So, well. I can't deduct points for that now, heh.

The story is a bit strange, but it is really unexpecting that the characters turn into unicorns and I had a good laugh at the ending.

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Not sure what this has to do with the game x.x

but on it's own this submission is okay.

Everything looks decent for the most part, but I didn't really like that the characters mouths don't move; moving the whole body to signify each character talking reminded me way too much of Veggietales xD. Aside from all that the colors were nice, and the voice acting was well done.

Things to take a second look at:
- This flash wasn't the funniest comedy submission I've seen, I would definitely work on your joke/ dialogue writing a bit
- It would have been nice to see the mouths of each character move; It was a bit confusing without the lip syncing or anything.
- I kind of expected this to actually be somewhat related to the Pilo game

Overall not bad though, just keep at it
~Dj Sonik

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Strange backstory

Well I don't truly see how this is much of a backstory to why the game happens really. It shows that three of the four soldiers were really just unicorns because their mouths never open when they speak is all. Very strange and completely unrelated backing story anyways. I guess it shows who is playing it anyways.

The voices were all nice since they were all done by Seymour who happens to be a wonderful voice actor anyways. No music though so that's alright as well I think.

The animation was pretty good and how long did you spend drawing the unicorns anyways? They look well drawn and I found the animation simplistic yet funny as well too. Would laugh if there had been a "Beware of unicorns disguised as humans" poster in the background I think. Would have made this slightly more humorous anyways.

Overall, funny yet completely unrelated backstory to the game. Not bad at all.

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