but this was just plain bad. I'm not here to drag you down but to try to help you out. First of all use higher FPS go for 20-30 and make the movie more "fluid". You need to have some kind of sound, some background music and sound effects so you get a feel of whats going on in the movie. If you want to you can Make your own sound effects (I do it cause I'm lazy and it sounds fun), record yourself and speed the tempo up, down, change the pitch, whatever to make it sound close to what you like. The best tip for you is obviously to work more with flash and everything will come natural.
Ok for first try.
It seemes to me that you need to explore flash more. There are many tools useful for creating better animation. Like motion tweens and filters used for glow effects. And add colour to your future flash submissions.
Adding sounds and a preloader helps make a submsssion better too. You can download Preloaders from here, on NG. And you can download music from the NG Audio portal. Anyway, Okay for first flash, and I'm looking forward to seeing you submit an improved flash in the future.