Re-review

Hi punisher, I got a mod to remove my other review, so now here's the original review again minus the unessential stuff. You've already read this, in other words.

I had to stop watching it. It was too painful to go on. YES, you did put effort into the story, and the sprites looked pretty good, but the dialogue is some of the most cringe-worthy almost-English I've seen in months. You occasionally break every rule of grammar in a single sentence. I felt like I was watching an anime in Japanese and having a Russian translate for me. It was honestly unintelligible. You've got the animation and sound down pretty good, but if you want to make an actual original story, you need to concentrate more on how the story is told, so that others can understand the story you have in your head. Try watching your own movie and reading it out loud to yourself. Try getting a friend to proofread it. Try studying some writing principles. You've got the imagination, you just need to focus it more.

Let's see...

Well, you're right. It's nice not to see the usual suspects, like Sonic and Mario. But a Sailor Moon/DBZ crossover is far from original. Plus the story is pretty generic, "bad guy shows up, want's powerful item good guys have."

Your animation and your sprite quality suck ass, but that's something that will improve with experience. A few things to watch out for. Make bigger text boxes, because when the characters said a lot, you compacted the text to fit into the box and it was kind of hard to read. And there were a few frames with text boxes that you forgot to program it to stop, so it just skipped the text box.

A far as your grammar, if english isn't your primary language, then I can forgive. But if it is your primary language then there is no excuse for grammar that bad.

Aw jesus this is awful.

Please use a preloader. Adding a loading bar you drew won't work as one.
Newgrounds has plenty of free preloaders you can use for this purpose.

Secondly, do not make sprite movies. They're not original since you're using graphics made by someone else, and they look generally bad.