Lol

dont listen 2 him, this is fine for what this is lol

Could have been funny

Pacing was bad, WAY too slow to punch line. Honestly this had a chance at being funny - I dig British humour. I get your joke, it was just delivered poorly.

I don't know of your drawing talent but considering there was virtually no motion you could have gone for some more interesting characters.

IF you can't draw, then I would suggest some voice acting - or collab with someone who can draw/animate.