hahaha
this idea ooks very nice. keep practicing your drawings and animation, i like the idea of this. i know you can do better, thats why im givnig you a 7
but +1 for the awkward trollface in between, thats an 8.
U mad?
Author Comments
The play button is the treasure chest. This isn't just a preloader. Please view the entire thing before you vote.
I made this to sharpen my claws for an upcoming series, while at the same time trying to introduce some of its characters. You can click on their posters at the end for a tidbit about each one.
Tell me what you like, tell me what you didn't like, but more importantly, help me improve. I want to make this series interesting for the viewers. Your feedback counts! PM me if you'd like to voice act for us, if you have some tips about as3, or even if you want to chat. Don't be a stranger, folks.
Ziggyness responds:
Problem, 7? > : [)
(Thanks for the review! The next one will be much more detailed. ^.^)
All there but...
Story... yep
Sound... yep and syncs up well
Art... yep if a little crude
It looks like you have the idea and know not just what sort of story you want to tell but how each scene should look. You have taken the time to put in things like wind moving the clothes and grasses, you even took the time to put in a few comic elements. Although ropey you have sort of set out some of the traits of the characters, the relaxed and nonchalant one in the tree putting out the fire. The rigorous training sort throwing Kunai into the target.
The thing that lets this down more than anything is the art... Draw draw and draw again. A lot of it looks like you thought "F*%K it that will do" as in the cloud passing behind the tree and the cut and paste grass. I know you would have spent more time on the people and that the other stuff comes second but it is the small touches that make something stand out. Oddly the Kunai look very well drawn I'm guessing this is because you used a reference image and used primitives to build them up rather than free hand drawing. I would say for now that primitives is the way to go for you and take every moment you have to draw free hand outside of Flash until you have honed it as a skill.
Keep going, don't bother about score just yet and most of all have fun :D
Ziggyness responds:
This is the perfect example of a review, thank you for noticing... eerily everything about the flash, lol. I'd say you have a good eye! You're right, the art is definitely what I plan on working on. In fact, I'm in the process of learning perspective drawing and detailing. I used the line tool to draw half the knife, then copy-pasted it and flipped it to make it symmetrical. You're right about the "F*&k it, this will do." after the second week I was ready to finish and animated the last scene with stick figures. Haha. Again, thank you for the kind and helpful review!
Quit with the trollfaces.
You lost a point because of the trollface. I'm sick of seeing those EVERYWHERE. Outside of that, movie looked awesome. I can't wait for the motion picture.
Ziggyness responds:
Lol, thank you for the review. I'll admit, it was a bit tacky. The actual series will be (a little) more serious. Stealing is, after all, SeRiouS BuSiNesS.