Flash like this has no excuse, even if it the first .
For example, just check out the games on Newgrounds.
What did you get for a grade?
Right now if NG translated to a grade... 30%
Your command button for pause or anything doesn't work, the graphics look like a preschooler drew it, the voice sucks ass. What's good about this in your mind?
Well this is my first flash so give me some slack.
I got a 94%
This is not a flash.
This is a .swf. You converted a powerpoint program into a .swf file, and it's bad quality, bad voice acting, and really the story is not that impressive.
So my advice to you is, "invest" in some shareware, find yourself some free flash software, and then you should download WavePad in the audio section to perfect the audio. Also, try actually having a story. But most importantly, use flash. Pivot, and all other related powerpoint programs just look terrible.