No Excuse.
Flash like this has no excuse, even if it the first .
For example, just check out the games on Newgrounds.
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We had do this project for our Arabic Class and I made a flash instead of a stupid poster. The main reason why because I did not want other people to work w/ me. I did it on a short story we had to read in class. It was good... I guess.
This is not a flash.
This is a .swf. You converted a powerpoint program into a .swf file, and it's bad quality, bad voice acting, and really the story is not that impressive.
So my advice to you is, "invest" in some shareware, find yourself some free flash software, and then you should download WavePad in the audio section to perfect the audio. Also, try actually having a story. But most importantly, use flash. Pivot, and all other related powerpoint programs just look terrible.