I did all the drawing and animation myself no sprites!!! I'd like to personally thank Nintendo for making such great games. I'd also like to tribute this video to my brother Mitch. This movie is not finished and will not be finished anytime. I am submitting this because I wanted to get a general feedback on my drawing and animation and how my content is. I also worked on this for like a 6 months and then set it aside for a couple years. Thanks for taking the time to watch and rate it based on the content I have and the potential.
Not bad
Not that bad, animation could have been smoother, and the syncing with the voices could have been better, but again you also said it was complete. Good job through, looks like it has potential. I liked the bit about Macho Man, I didn't know anyone else remembered who he was, lol jk
Yeah the voice syncing was actually really hard because the timing was off. I tried hard to get both the voice matched up as well but I was trying to be fast when I was actually working on this project. I love Macho Man he's awesome. I was going to have the kool-aid man come into the movie and have them argue but my interest just got lost. Thanks!
it was petty good
i liked the animation and the art was petty good.
sorry to hear about your bother.
Sorry about your bro...
I wouldn't want to animate either if I lost one of my brothers.....
Anyway, about your animation. I would say that in terms of animation-motion you've got that down. However, if you're gonna make jokes, you've definitely gonna need more comical facial expressions for your characters. Also, I would suggest you add a bit more colour to your characters, a bit more shadow on different areas (experiment with this) so they look more 3D (unless you were actually aiming for 2D). The shotgun thing made me laugh, but longer would be better next time. Kudos and good luck.
Ah yes I see the comical facial expressions. Adding more color as far as shading or just making them more vibrant? Yeah I was thinking about adding shadows but I got really lazy and felt it would add more time movie but I guess someone did notice. I am glad you liked that joke I fleshed out a few other ideas that involved mario but with everything happening I just lost interest but still wanted feedback on the animation. Thanks!
Allright you want a blunt review?
I feel like these other guys went a little too easy on you. First off, for your first animation this was pretty darn good. Areas to work on:
1. Voices. The voice acting could have been much better. Also, feel free to speak faster and by that I mean about twice as fast. You were speaking so slowly that took away from the comedy and story.
2. Unnessisary parts. That beginning part where mario just goes accross the screen doing nothing but hitting that block is unnessisary. You can just start where the turtle is for the joke.
3. legnth: I know that this is unfinished but when you make a flash for real something like this needs to have at least 5 or 6 jokes in there meaning at least twice as long as this
4. animation. The background could definately be more detailed. other then that the animation really wasn't that far off from the animation quality of some of the more popular videos so you don't really have to worry about that.
As I said so many people give such undeserved generous reviews that the animator doesn't know what to improve on. Honestly, I think 50% of the people on newgrounds only know how to vote a 10! But look for the reviews that actually give you some helpful critisism and try not to pay too much attention to the ones who give you 10s because the whole point is to improve.....
Thank you this is what I was looking for a detailed review on what I can improve. I didn't even realize my voice timing was off but now that I know it makes sense and getting rid of the unnessiary parts makes sense. I just wanted to build up to the joke but you are correct it's not needed. As for as the background having more detail just in general more clouds not just a blue screen? What kind of detail can I add the enhance it I want to have high quaility video considering I actually want to be good at animation. Thank you for also commenting on the animation because I was wondering how that was and how far off I was from other people. I spent alot of time actually making sure the movements were fluid but in some parts I felt there might have been some jumping. I will take this feedback and use it towars my next project.
ahhh
i did something you guys never need to do ever, rate before the movie is finished
If i would have seen that the movie ended like that, i would have rated less
PD: the movie was going great at the beginning