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One Eyed Jack part 1

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Click on the word bubbles or sound effects for sound. I couldn't enlarge the type becaue it was making the entry go over 10 megs. Anyway, hope you enjoy it, and I've got about 6 or seven more parts coming soon. All artwork, writing, music, sounds and voices by Jon, the Sapoman.

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Gonna be interesting

Already over and over again stories of people who have forgotten their past were written, so your story is somewhat predictable, but it can still work, so be careful not to fall in to the trivial in Part Two.
Anyway you've been able to create an intriguing character, this is a point in your favor.
Regarding the technical problems, even if you somehow managed to solve them thanks to the voices that you can start by clicking the balloon, this fails to completely rectify the problem you have in reading. I read in your description that you had problems in this regard, but this is still a problem that takes away points to your work, you certainly can use the zoom, but don't you think that having to move the whole page is rather annoying to read a comic?
As for your drawing style, I'll tell you ... is not bad, looks like a combination between the comic book Dylan Dog for shadows and dark environments and designs of new and futuristic Dysney's comics, always bring an extreme future but always accompanied by that charm of ancient times.
Overall a good job, you have to work right on the page size and improve your designs that still have some woodiness (it is clear in particular on page 11 where he asks AGAIN himself where he comes from, who are his people... that's kinda everything he says in all the comic... can he say something else?), not so good the longevity of comics, unless you work alone , but I remind you that a normal comic have at least 50/60 pages, with this I'm not saying you have to kill yourself with work, but you have to to find one or two partners that help in the realization of designs and maybe even with the balloons. I'll wait for the next part!

sapoman responds:

This is not your ordinary origin story. You will see how the story unfolds and wraps you in a conundrum of riddle and strange mysticism which will ultimately change your life...forever. Just kidding. But it might entertain you!

sapoman

this is a flip book and not animated at all.other than that i love your artwork!

sapoman responds:

It is not just a flip book. I will animate some parts, just for you. :)

pretty good

the drawings were amazing but i couldn't read some of the small writing and the music kinda creeps me out a bit, but great effort, i liked what i saw

sapoman responds:

Thanks for saying my drawings were amazing. I just need to enlarge the type, but how? I might just animate the whole thing so the words don't get in the way.

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Feb 3, 2011
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