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hi everybody!!! this is the first movie i ever submit to newgrounds, and just because of that i would relly appreciate if you could tell me what you thought when you saw it, ok thank you

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awesome :P

cool :D

Ok ^_^

Good first animatsion you got talent if you pratice your first animation is better than my was LOL

Well, it's a start

Okay, so aside from the rather obvious comments of "This needs sound", I do think that the addition of sound effects, voices and even music would be a plus. Getting them lined up would bring so much more to the piece.

After that, you'll see that there is a further requirement for something in the way of slowing down the animation slightly - draw it out and expose the plot a little more, so that we actually get to see who the characters are.

On top of that, there is a very real sense that you've got animating talent, which just needs to be polished up a little by the drawing catching up with it. Try getting yourself more control over the pointer, by zooming in. More time spent getting the drawing right certainly works and you will reap the rewards.

Of course, while it wasn't obvious that there was a plot, you really do need to get yourself a more rewarding plot line, as without being able to see one from this, it feels as if there is nothing to drive the piece forward. Look to the Writing forum, as scripts are turning up there, if you're searching for pieces to hone your skills with.

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it was ok i guess

needs to be longer much longer

What the heck is this

Give it some more sence and sound

Q4 responds:

yeah, i know i hav to get the sound but something is messing it upp all the time, i don't know what it is but i'll try to get the sound :)

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Views
2,399
Votes
6
Score
2.83 / 5.00

Uploaded
Jan 17, 2011
12:28 PM EST
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