I have to agree that the text is very hard to read, if you filled the Text bubbles with white it would look much better,but pink is never a good choice for reading text so I suggest either make it darker, or make it a unified black :). The idea for this seems well enough you just need to fix up a few things, which will come with practice! I also suggest that you not use the newgrounds button as the next button, as well as learning the action script to tie "next" to the spacebar or so, this would clean up the image we see on the screen and in the end I think would prove more useful to you, also learning the AS to Loop music, or change the song as scenes appear would make this look much better :). Over all I'll give you a 5 as a review and a 3 /5 :)
Very poor work
You need to spend far more time to produce anything nearing a quality anamation. I think this lacked in all areas, the speech bubbles being the most obvious problem with this. Igave you a one for what seemed like an original story idea, but the story was too long and i didnt bother reading it. Txt was far far far too small.
Thank you for a review that isn't so blunt. This is the first flash I've ever done, however. I'm trying to find information to all of my bugs, but the obvious text will be fixed in the next episode.
am i supposed to bring magnifier for this movie to read text ? i cant read shit , its small and speech bubbles should be not transparent...
The music was kind of annoying and stopped somewhere halfway the play.
I had so much trouble reading what the characters were saying because of colour, size and font.
Plus, this is not really a movie, for you have to click every time you want to see the next line(s) of text, can't really call it an interactive movie too.
If you decide to keep using a button like that, try to make sure it stays in one single spot instead of letting it go everywhere, makes it way less annoying!
For the voice bubbles it would be better to give then some kind of background, because some of the text is very hard to read at this point.