This is kinda horrible. Read through this, though.
First off, let me start with this: I know my flashes aren't too good either. No need to go saying that I'm/my flashes are pieces of shit.
With that out of the way, this flash really sucked. I couldn't understand a word they were saying. Maybe you could get a professional microphone. If you don't have enough money, try to keep your voice at a normal, understandable tone.
I really couldn't get past the fact that the character didn't really move. Next time you should try making moving parts to the character. If you can't do that by the next movie, at least try to do a bit more than a stick character. Hell, a circle head on a rectangle body is more appealing to the eye than a stick.
I give you a two for effort. At least the story was mildly entertaining.
And I am not an asswipe, so don't go calling me that because you didn't like me critiquing you.